Assignment 3

  
Assignment 3

Red little riding hood pov

Once upon a time in a country village, there lived me, l was the prettiest girl in the village. My mother so fond of me she made my red cloak and it suited me so well. I look so gorgeous, no wonder why people started calling me Little red riding hood. One day her mother was making a cake, said that “Go, Red, and see how your granny is doing, I hear that she had been very sick for a couple weeks. Take some a pie to her and medicine, she will feel good for no time.

Soon as my mom told me to go to my granny. I left immediately from the house and grab the basket that had the cake and butter on my way out.  My granny lives near the beach and its very long way, but I will walk in the woods because It has the shortcut for the beach. As I was minding my own business, I saw a wolf who was driving a car especially Ferrari. I never saw a wolf who can drive a car, so unusual. But I could ask him to get me a ride to the granny house. I lifted my arms for him to notice me and when he notices, he stops the car. He asked,” You, Little red, where are you heading?

Then I asked him “I’m going to my granny can you give me a ride? the wolf answer and said, “Yeah, Sista, no problem”. I thanked him again. So, I went inside the car and sit on the front seat and its started smell like smoke and I started sniffing the place and ask, do you smoke? I think the wolf is a smoker and he is acting like a. weird. He didn’t answer my question but I know he smokes even he denies it. He looks like he is wealthy just because he rides that stupid Ferrari and by the way is super cool.

Weird Wolf(that is his name for this fairy-tale) Pov

As I was driving in the woods and my stomach got hunger, ooh, some good food could take my hunger. I had some smoke, but it didn’t take my hunger even when I like smoking. I was driving and I notice a little girl who was wearing a red cloak and had a basket on her hand. I thought this could be my chance to eat her. I saw her lifting her hand for a ride and I took a chance and stop my car. Next, I roll up my window to hearing her voice. I asked her where was she heading? She asked with an innocent voice “Hey, I’m going to my granny, can you give a ride? OOoh, she is so dumb for getting on a car with strangers, but I don’t mind anything at all. I answer” yeah, Little red, no problem. After I answer she got inside the car and she just stars sniffing my car and asks, do you smoke or something, she said, and I didn’t answer to her, but I think she already knows it. I start the engine and started to drive a car. As I was driving, I was thinking about something or do some plan or something else. How I would achieve for eating her but how? I thought. Soon as I stop the car near the beach, and I should eat her granny and later Little red riding hood. I’m so genius, why didn’t think before, thought the wolf. She left the car and started the walk towards the beach. I should go now before the little red gets there early than me. I left and drive my car very fast as I could. I was finally there, and my hunger got more aggressively as I was approaching the granny house. first, I did was, I knock the door then answered with a weak voice “who is it? And I said” it's me, little red riding hood,” said with girlish voice. Granny said I come in, darling. Soon as she said to come in and rushed inside and scared her very much that she fell off the bed said, “you’re not Little red, what are you doing here”. I answered “no, it's not little red, I’m here eat you. I grab and eaten her whole body and said “she was deliciously goodies, omg I never had tasted this kind of meat, huh. I patted my stomach, one to go yet and I disguise myself as the granny, it was a stupid idea, but I didn’t have other choices because of the time. I know she was coming any second and put the granny’s clothes on and lied down on the bed.



Little Red Riding hood Pov



The entire ride I was thinking where this wolf came from? Who is he? what he does for a living? is he a joke? As I was another world, I come back to reality and I notice the wolf stopped the car, I notice we are here, already. That was very quick for my knowledge. I thanked him and walked out of the car. I started the walk to the beach. The wolf left very fast, I thought where he was rushing to, in my mind. as I was coming near to the beach, I saw granny’s neighbor and he was taking a sunbath. I would like that also if I had the time for sunbathing. I must get to my sick granny. I should hurry and as I was leaving, I said hello to the neighbor and he said hello to me also. Finally, I was at my granny house and I knock the door and granny said with rasped sound “who is there? I answered “it’s me, little red riding hood and I have some medicine and some pie for you. Granny said to come in and again with a rasped sound I heard the first time maybe granny gotten sicker. I came inside and look around the place and I saw granny on the bed, and she looks little different, what is wrong with her? did she turn to abomination or did she got a virus or something? My granny is looking weird. I asked “Granny your voice sounds so odd. is something the matter?”. Oh, I just have a touch of a cold, Squeaked the wolf adding a cough at the end to prove the point. I knew something was wrong, so I asked again "But Grandmother!  What big ears you have," said Little Red Riding Hood as she edged closer to the bed.

"The better to hear you with, my dear," replied the wolf.

I said "But Grandmother!  What big eyes you have”

"The better to see you with, my dear," replied the wolf.

I said again with fear "But Grandmother!  What big teeth you have

"The better to eat you with, my dear," roared the wolf and he leaped out of the bed and began to chase the little girl.

I noticed too late, that this wasn’t my granny but the weird wolf. I ran across the room and thorough the door and shouting “Help! Wolf!”

The neighbor who was at the beach nearby hear my cry and ran towards the cottage as fast as he could. He grabbed the wolf and made him spit out the poor Grandmother who was a bit frazzled by the whole experience, but still in one piece. ”Oh, Granny, I was so scared, I sobbed "I'll never take a lift from strangers or go to that godforsaken forest.

"There, there, child.  You've learned an important lesson.  Thank goodness you shouted loud enough for this kind neighbor hear you!"

The neighbors knocked out the wolf and carried him deep into the forest where he wouldn't bother people any longer.

I and my granny had a nice lunch and talk.



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Kommentit

  1. This story was quite simply little red riding hood into a modern setting. I would've preferred if the story itself had a more originality with some metaphors and stuff. There are also quite a lot of grammar mistakes with conjunctions and verb forms. I think your spelling was fine you just used certain words in the wrong form or missed them. I also thought the word choices were pretty good.
    Good things:
    1. How you formatted your text with including pov changes and changing the text to black.
    2. I enjoyed the parts of the story that you made modern. I thought it was funny that there was a wolf driving and calling little red riding hood sista.
    3. Word choices. I thought your language was in this sense pretty good. Words like godforsaken and squeaking in their contexts added nice flavor to the text.
    Bad things:
    1. You wrote the name of the story into the text.
    2. Grammar. You had many grammar mistakes. For example: "As I was driving in the woods and my stomach got hunger, ooh, some good food could take my hunger." Should be written "As I was driving in the woods, I got hungry. "Ooh, some good food should take my hunger."
    3. Originality. In my opinion this was a pretty bland text that could've done with more of your own work added to the text.
    Little red riding hood was the story this was based on.

    VastaaPoista

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